red - undergraduate admissions essays


✔ Supplemental essay

✔ Client Information (School/Academic interest): N University/ Healthcare


✔ Common application essay

✔ Client Information (School/Academic interest): C University/ Biology 


✔ Supplemental Essays

✔ Client Information (School/Academic interest): D University/ International Studies 


✔ Common Application Essay

✔ Client Information (School/Academic interest): D University/ International Studies  


✔ Common Application Essays)

✔ Client Information (School/Academic interest): S University/ Computer Science 


✔ Program : Carrot - diamond (Common Application Essays, 8건 Practice)

✔ Client Information : 미국 서부 공립 고등학교 10학년/ Common Application Essays

✔ What we have done for the client: Evaluation sheet 제공, Essay 구조 잡기, 문장의 흐름/ 연결 교정, 문학적 표현 지도

✔ Picture Information (일부만 발췌) : 

#1: Essay writing (client) + Edited and feedback given by J&B (Week 1)

#2: Essay writing (client) + Edited and feedback given by J&B (Week 2)

#3: Essay writing (client) + Edited and feedback given by J&B (Week 8)

#4: Essay Evaluation Sheet

#5: Feedback for the Student 


✔Program: Carrot - silver (Supplemental Essays, 3개)

✔ Client Information : Cornell University, Dartmouth College 지원

✔ What we have done for the client : 문단 재구성, 자연스러운 연결을 위한 아이디어 삽입, 문법 및 단어 교정, 간결성 위한 문장 수정

✔ Picture Information (일부만 발췌) : 

#1: supplemental essay edit (Cornell)

#2: Supplemental essay edit (Continued)

#3: Supplemental essay edit (Dartmouth)


✔Program: Carrot - silver (Supplemental Essays, 5개)

✔ Client Information : Brown University/ Supplemental Essays 

✔ What our client asked for :아이디어 수정, 구조잡기, Paraphrasing, 주장 뒷받침 찾기 등 

✔ What we have done for the client: 문법 교정, 어색한 문장 교정, 단어 선택 점검 

✔ Picture Information (일부만 발췌) : 

#1: Please inform us of the exams and scores you find most meaningful

#2: Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated earlier in this application?

#3: What do you hope to experience at Brown through the Open Curriculum, and what do you hope to contribute to the Brown community?

#4:  Tell us about the place, or places, you call home. These can be physical places where you have lived, or a community or group that is important to you

#5:  Same question as #4


✔Program: Carrot - silver (Supplemental Essays, 10개)

✔ Client Information : University of California, Berkeley/ Supplemental Essays 

✔ What our client asked for : 아이디어수정, 구조잡기, Paraphrasing, 주장 뒷받침 찾기 등 

✔ What we have done for the client: 문법 교정, 어색한 문장 교정, 단어 선택 점검 

✔ Picture Information (일부만 발췌) : 

#1: What would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you developed and demonstrated that talent over time? 

#2: What have you done to make your school or your community a better place?

#3: Think about an academic subject that inspires you. Describe how you have furthered this interest inside and/or outside of the classroom. 

#4: Describe how you express your creative side.

#5: Same question as #3

#6: Beyond what has already been shared in you application, what do you believe makes you stand out as a strong candidate for admissions to the University of California?

#7: Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?

#8: Same question as #2


✔Program: Carrot - silver (Common Application Essays, 6개)

✔ Client Information : Common Application 작성

✔ What our client asked for : 영어로 직접 작성한 Common app을 교정, Common app에 잘 맞춰진 에세이로 교정 희망

✔ What we have done for the client: 아이디어 수정 (대부분 아이디어가 없었음), 끝문단에서의 결론 삽입, 한국식 표현 교정

✔ Picture Information (일부만 발췌) : 

#1: Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and that did you learn from the experience?

#2: Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.

#3 : Same topic as #1


✔Program: Carrot - silver (Supplemental Essays, 5개)

✔ Client Information : Johns Hopkins University/ Supplemental Essays

✔ What our client asked for : Edits (300-400 words) 

✔ What we have done for the client: 짧은글안에 하고자하는 말이 제대로 담길 수 있도록 교정 

✔ Picture Information (일부만 발췌) : 

#1: Talk about a time, in or outside the classroom, when you worked with others and what you learned from the experience

#2: Same question as #1

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